Welcome and thank you to those who gather at my humble blog to read my contribution to Six Sentence Sunday.  Thanks also to those who not only read, but comment too!  Your words are invaluable to me.

So, here I am using my random scrolling method once more.  I may alight upon something ridiculous.  Just so you know, this is the first draft, completely un-edited and thus far unfinished as well.

Today we are in chapter... 21, apparently.  The scene is the championship round of swordfighting in a tournament.  The competitors are fairly well matched and this has been going on for a while.


          "It seemed like hours since the bout had begun and still both men fought on as if possessed of serious ego issues.  Neither would give any quarter, and the spectators were yet unsure of who would be their tournament champion.  First Sir Anton would appear to have the advantage, then Lord Allemande.  Feints and lunges, parries and cuts, all in a primal rhythm, an age-old cadence of sweat, something I can’t think of right now, and battle.
          The crowd was deadly silent, listening to the tang of steel catching steel, the grunts of the combatants, even their footfalls on the field where a day of tramping boots had worn the grass away and dirt and dust stood sentinel in place of the green blades that had once reigned in peace over the ground. Two young ladies nearly opened wounds on their hands from digging their fingers into their palms."


In case anyone is wondering, the young ladies are Sir Anton's betrothed, Graciela (you may remember the two of them from previous SSS entries), and Princess Katarina, who has a major thing for Lord Allemande--a man who has been forbidden to her and is ignoring her, two circumstances guaranteed to stoke the passions of her fifteen-year-old heart.

That's all from me for today.   I will apologize in advance if I don't get to all my favorite Sixers' posts.  Feel like I'm coming down sick and I'm hoping to spend as much of the day as possible resting.

Kate

 


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Linda Morris
12/23/2012 07:22

I love this--so vivid, and lots of "five senses" detail that really brings it alive. Great six!

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12/23/2012 08:38

Kate, this is wonderful. Be well and Happy Holidays to you and your loved ones.

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Kate Warren
12/23/2012 08:41

Thank you Linda and Charmaine. Happy Holidays to you too!

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12/23/2012 09:30

Hope you're all better real soon. And if this is draft, I'm green with envy.

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Kate Warren
12/23/2012 09:32

Thanks, Sue. There are much worse parts in my draft, I just can't bring myself to post them. ;)

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12/23/2012 10:20

Is this the Medieval equivalent of Football, or really a fight to the death?

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Kate Warren
12/23/2012 16:17

Technically I would say jousting is the medieval equivalent of football, but you've got the basic spirit of it down. Fights to the death come later in the novel. ;)

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12/23/2012 11:33

I like the contrast between the sword fight and the two women digging their nails into their palms. Those (small) injuries tell us so much!

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12/23/2012 11:37

I love that small note to yourself in there: " . . .something I can't think of right now . . . "

I'm so glad someone does that, too! My drafts are full of XXs. :D

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12/23/2012 11:42

Very vivid descriptions of the scene! It really makes the scene come alive.

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12/23/2012 12:19

The tang of steel, the women with open wounds on their palms....so much to love about this snippet. The entire scene is great.

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12/23/2012 13:01

Nice setting with plenty of emotion. I hope you feel better soon.

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Sandra Sookoo
12/23/2012 13:46

sounds like an action packed scene. Hope you feel better soon.

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12/23/2012 14:05

Excellent description of the battle - I could visualize it and sympathize with the tense young ladies! I hope you all feel better soon at your house - happy holidays!

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Kate Warren
12/23/2012 16:19

Thank you everyone for your comments and well wishes (is that even grammatically correct?) Unfortunately I can now confirm that I do indeed have the flu. Looks like my oldest is getting it as well. Holding out hope that my youngest boy will remain healthy. He's had the shot because the diabetes puts him at high risk. But my Emily is all better! There's comfort in that.

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12/23/2012 17:07

Oh how beautifully written! And as a bonus (just for me, I'm sure <g>), your heroine has my mother's name.

Sorry you and your family are sick. Do take care--best wishes

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12/23/2012 18:36

Love your choice of words. Fab 6.
The flu, yuck. Hope you're getting good rest and feel better soon.

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01/05/2013 19:27

Love "possessed of serious ego issues" LOL! The whole six is fabulous. I hope you were able to get some rest. (I'm so late. This was two weeks ago, so if you're not 100% by now I'll cry FOR you.)

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