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2/9/2013

Welcome to another special February edition of Weeked Writing Warriors in KateWarrenLand. Thank you to everyone who came here last Sunday to read, and comment. I'm sorry I didn't get all my usual visiting done. Was struck down with a cold. Hopefully, I'll do better this week.

That said, it's time to introduce this week's eight sentences. From Chapter 13, I give you a secret admirer and a sonnet.

          A hand reached out from the bushes and pressed a scrap of parchment into Lilia St. Robert’s hand. She glanced around quickly but no one appeared to be present. With quickly beating heart, she strolled as calmly as possible to a shaded corner of the gardens and read the writing.

          The sun in brightness pales to see thy smile.
          The stars are envious of thy shining grace.
          The moon is dimmer than thy glow of youth.
          My heart doth beat but to behold thy face.
          If only thou return my love, my sweet,
          I’ll lay the world entire at thy feet.

That's all from me for this week. Please join me in visiting the talented authors who participate in WeWriWa.

Kate

59 Comments

Elaine Cantrell link

2/10/2013 12:12:58 am

Wish someone would write me a poem. Nice.

Kate Warren

2/10/2013 05:18:55 am

Thanks, Elaine.

Teresa Cypher link

2/10/2013 12:18:10 am

Wow...romantic. I like it, Kate. And it's the prefect post for Valentine's day week. :-)

Kate Warren

2/10/2013 05:19:31 am

Thank you, Teresa. I'm going to continue with the romance theme for the rest of the month. I may even post some extras during the week.

Melonie link

2/10/2013 02:19:24 am

Great choice for a pre-Valentine's Day Sunday :)

Excellent work with the poem, did you model it after anything? It is very Byron-esque.
Only thing that pulled me out - a hand held out a note - but she didn't see anyone around, this put an image of a bodiless hand sticking out of the bushes in my head!

Kate Warren

2/10/2013 04:58:08 am

Oh man! Now I'm going to have to include a disembodied hand delivering notes to people in one of my humor/parody stories. :o)

I didn't model the sonnet on any particular style or poet's work. It just came to me.

Clare Davidson link

2/10/2013 02:26:40 am

Very romantic. I wish someone would write romantic poetry like that for me!

Kate Warren

2/10/2013 05:19:59 am

Me too! Thank you for stopping by, Clare.

A.S. Fenichel link

2/10/2013 03:00:21 am

Wow! and you write sonnets too.... lovely little snippet.

Kate Warren

2/10/2013 05:21:01 am

Thanks, A.S. I only write sonnets (or any poetry) very occasionally.

Debbie link

2/10/2013 03:10:54 am

What a lovely poem. :-)

Kate Warren

2/10/2013 05:21:19 am

Thank you, Debbie!

Veronica Scott link

2/10/2013 03:38:21 am

Hmm, she's braver than I am, taking the parchment from some anonymous person LOL! But the poem was lovely...so, an intriguing excerpt!

Kate Warren

2/10/2013 05:22:08 am

Thanks, Veronica! Lilia is very innocent and trusting. :o)

sue link

2/10/2013 03:48:58 am

did you write the sonnet? if you did carry on with the poetry. It's a difficult format, (so I don't do it lol)

Kate Warren

2/10/2013 04:59:24 am

I did write the sonnet. My poetry is quite rare. I find that when I try to write it, it's bad. It only works when I just let the poem come to me.

charmaine gordon link

2/10/2013 04:12:04 am

Lovely. One thing, Kate. You could delete in the last sentence b4 the sonnet, "the writing" Began to read is enough. Just a suggestion.

Kate Warren

2/10/2013 05:00:11 am

Thank you, Charmaine. This is still pretty rough. I haven't finished the first draft yet.

Sue Ann Bowling link

2/10/2013 06:04:41 am

Poem , yes, and hearkens back to the days when men wrote poetry to their loves. But I don't think it counts as a sonnet, which is a very specific form and more than six lines.

Kate Warren

2/10/2013 07:38:19 am

Really? I thought any love poem could be called a sonnet. Thanks for the info, Sue Ann.

Kate Warren

2/10/2013 07:40:34 am

Yep. Just looked it up and I'm eight lines short. Sonnets must be fourteen lines long. Well, Lilia's admirer is no Shakespeare (which is pretty much a given since this takes place well before Shakespeare was born).

Sarah W link

2/10/2013 07:52:47 am

I love it---is she in a maze? That's how I visualized it---the hand coming through the hedge!

Kate Warren

2/10/2013 08:12:15 am

Close. It's a garden on the palace grounds, so there's a maze-like quality to it.

Joyce Scarbrough link

2/10/2013 09:06:24 am

*Sigh* How romantic! Brings back memories from my gothic romance days. Great snippet!

Kate Warren

2/10/2013 12:39:42 pm

Thank you, Joyce.

Evelyn Jules link

2/10/2013 09:11:46 am

Wow, how beautiful. I'm always envious of people who can write poetry, or even attempt to. This is lovely. I'm so excited to see where you take things from here, Kate! Fantastic work! :)

Kate Warren

2/10/2013 12:40:42 pm

I'm envious of the too! I'm rarely inspired to pen anything resembling a poem. Thanks so much for your kind words.

Virginia Kellly link

2/10/2013 09:17:52 am

What a beautiful sonnet! Now, of course, I hope we're find out who wrote it.

Kate Warren

2/10/2013 12:42:02 pm

Well now I have to decide whether or not to tell you. ;o) Next week's eight will feature a different couple.

Ok, I'll give you a hint: he's a prince.

Dana link

2/10/2013 10:09:20 am

Beautiful poetry. Wish I could do that. :)

Kate Warren

2/10/2013 12:42:24 pm

Thank you, Dana! :)

Frank Fisher link

2/10/2013 10:35:13 am

Nice narrative and the poem was lovely. I didn't know you wrote poetry (I'm working on a collection of them myself). Good stuff!

Kate Warren

2/10/2013 12:43:42 pm

Thank you, Frank. I don't write a lot of poetry. I think I have two poems that stand on their own, without ties to one of my stories. Good luck with your collection.

Botanist link

2/10/2013 10:45:50 am

Lovely poem, but confound those pesky disembodied hands :)

Kate Warren

2/10/2013 12:44:22 pm

I know. And I didn't even realize that Thing from The Addams Family lived in Frandia. ;o)

Lila Shaw link

2/10/2013 10:54:20 am

I'm not all that romantic I guess, because my first thought was why didn't she chase down the owner of the mysterious hand first, then read the note? LOL

Kate Warren

2/10/2013 12:55:01 pm

LOL I can't imagine Lilia chasing him down. A few of the other characters might though. ;o)

Brenda Barry link

2/10/2013 12:38:53 pm

Wow! so beautifully written. I love the poem and I loved the visual of the hands. Great job. :-) Will be back next week for more.

Kate Warren

2/10/2013 12:55:27 pm

Thank you, Brenda!

E. P. Beaumont link

2/10/2013 12:52:59 pm

Intriguing snippet; I find myself trying to guess the historical period, the POV character's state of mind -- certainly the poem is unexpected -- though for some reason I have a quite vivid (though likely inaccurate) picture of the gardens.

Kate Warren

2/10/2013 12:56:26 pm

Thanks, E.P. The story is set in the early 15th century. I'm glad it intrigued you.

Sara Barnard link

2/10/2013 01:42:16 pm

Hey Katie, I love this scene! So historic and romantic ... I can't wait to see who wrote the note!!

Kate Warren

2/13/2013 11:06:35 am

Thank you, Sara. It's a prince. But that's the only clue I'm giving. ;)

Siobhan Muir link

2/10/2013 02:21:40 pm

Well, then. Definitely an admirer. Great snippet, Kate. :)

Kate Warren

2/13/2013 11:07:08 am

Thank you, Siobhan.

Jenna Jaxon link

2/10/2013 03:28:06 pm

Poetry is so romantic. I'm surprised the more romance heroes don't write them to their lady loves. Good job on this one!

Kate Warren

2/13/2013 11:08:06 am

Good point, Jenna. Maybe we should start a campaign to make romance heroes write more poetry!

Carrie-Anne link

2/10/2013 04:41:05 pm

What a romantic poem! The art of writing love poems to one's beloved seems like a lost artform these days.

Kate Warren

2/13/2013 11:08:50 am

Thank you, Carrie-Anne. It does indeed seem like a lost artform. I know I've never gotten a love poem.

Paula Martin link

2/11/2013 01:49:31 am

Lovely poem - and what an interesting way to receive it!

Kate Warren

2/13/2013 11:09:09 am

Thanks, Paula!

Catherine Cavendish link

2/11/2013 07:02:28 pm

This was lovely. Just right for Valentine's week!

Kate Warren

2/13/2013 11:09:30 am

Thank you, Catherine!

Carol Duff link

2/13/2013 12:58:46 pm

I agree that this is perfect for Valentine's week. I love your poetry. The hand (without the body) doesn't bother me for it adds romantic mystery. Does the hand belong to the writer of the note? Or is it a courier, assigned to deliver it? Does she know who wrote the note? Or is that yet for her to discover.? As for having been ill, I am trying to get over pneumonia myself.

Kate Warren

2/13/2013 01:42:14 pm

I hadn't decided whether the writer delivered it or not. He could have sent it with a page, but then there wouldn't have been a need for a page to hide in the bushes. She doesn't know the identity of the poet, only who she hopes it is.

Pneumonia is no fun. I've had it myself. Take it easy as much as you can Carol.

Sarah Ballance link

2/16/2013 12:56:47 am

Beautiful! Though I am no proper lady. I'd have been in there with sticks and leaves in my hair looking for the body to which the hand belonged, LOL!

Kate Warren

2/16/2013 03:16:50 am

LOL Sarah! Remind me not to model any of my historical fiction characters after you. ;o)

B.Lloyd link

2/16/2013 01:13:47 am

I do like the mystery of the hand coming out of the bushes/shrubbery..:) Very intriguing and already gave me a mental picture of a Wonderland-like garden...:)

Kate Warren

2/16/2013 03:17:30 am

Thank you B.Lloyd! I love getting feedback like that!

Kate Warren

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