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Secret revealed. WeWriWa Oct1, 2022

10/1/2022

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Welcome back, and Happy October! This week I managed to enter my link correctly on the WeWriWa blog. To visit the blog, and thus all the awesome writers who participate, click the image below.
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Last week Maja's aunt Asgrid told her she did not think it was necessary to keep hiding the truth, but would go along with it for a while longer. This week, the secret is revealed to readers, but the men from Hilvard will continue to be left in the dark.

This week's snippet:
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     Maja curled herself tighter under the furs and fought waves of grief. She had thought there would be more time to spend with Uncle Hjelmar, riding across the meadow, wailing like a banshee as she was never allowed to do in Lenuka where she was a representative of her father and the crown of Islak. In Hjelmar’s village, though everyone knew she was the princess, she had been allowed a few brief weeks each summer to be just a child.
     Maja swallowed her tears and tried to clear her mind. Aunt Asgrid was right; she needed rest. On the morrow there would be a great many decisions to be made, and she knew her aunt would require her counsel. Her head hurt less, thanks to some herbs Lene had given her, but she could not quite settle and convince her body to rest.
     Forcing her breathing to slow, Maja carefully did not think about home, her parents, her brother, or her uncle. She did not think of the village either. Instead, she found herself picturing a handsome yet dirty face and deep, dark eyes, the color of which she did not yet know.
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The rest of the scene is below, if you'd like to read it. Thanks for stopping by.

Kate 


There had not been enough light in the cave to see. Why Jorgen of Hilvard's face should intrude into her thoughts she could not say, nor why the memory of his eyes should be both frightening and comforting. He had not shown any sign of seeing her as anything other than an injured woman. No threat had been implied in his gaze, his questions, or his probing of her wound. Why then did she feel nervous thinking back to that brief moment when their gazes had met and locked? It had not been long, half a moment really, certainly not long enough to cause Maja any discomfort this much later.
     Rather than fight the thoughts, she allowed herself to be soothed by them. She was not afraid of her feelings, only confused by them. It could not be attraction she felt, she was certain, for she had felt that before and it was a far more overwhelming set of emotions. Flutterings of the stomach, skipping of beats of her heart, and a feeling of lightness to almost giddiness. None of that did the thought of Jorgen Andriksson give her. And when her weary mind wondered how it would feel to have his strong arms around her, she paid it no mind at all, but rather snuggled deeper under her furs as if she truly was held and safe.


12 Comments
Jessica Subject link
10/2/2022 06:34:38 am

Perhaps she's experiencing a more mature kind of attraction. Though I wonder what he would do if he knew her secret. Nice snippet!

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Sue Barr link
10/2/2022 06:40:08 am

Great excerpt. I'm thinking he knew who she was, but stayed quiet. I guess we'll find out...

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Daryl Devore
10/2/2022 09:03:27 am

The overwhelming feelings of grief are well written. I suspect at some point the security of the "furs" are going to be replaced by Jorgen's arms.
Tweeted.

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Nancy Gideon link
10/2/2022 09:53:53 am

She's a gonner, she just doesn't know it yet!

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Veronica Scott link
10/2/2022 10:03:58 am

Love the snippet, really well done and descriptive while keeping the story moving.

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Kate Warren
10/2/2022 02:14:32 pm

Thank you Jessica, Sue, Daryl, Nancy, and Veronica!

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Teresa Cypher link
10/2/2022 05:25:41 pm

I agree completely with Nancy--she is a goner! Nice writing, Kate!

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Elaine Cantrell link
10/2/2022 09:07:00 pm

She may not be ready to admit she's attracted to him, but she is.

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Jenna Jaxon
10/2/2022 09:28:10 pm

I agree with the others. She's kidding herself if she thinks she's not attracted to him. That last line tells it all! Great snippet! Tweeted.

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Kate Warren
10/3/2022 09:14:54 am

Thank you Teresa, Elaine, and Jenna.

And yes, you are all correct. Maja is a goner. :)

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Cie from Naughty Netherworld Press link
10/4/2022 09:47:27 pm

The intensity of grief overlapping with the intensity of longing. Nicely written. Tweeted

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Kate Warren
10/5/2022 09:10:45 am

Thank you, Cie!

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