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Six Sentence Sundays 4/22/12

4/22/2012

30 Comments

 
Thank you to everyone who reads and comments.  You all make my week! 

This week we will continue with another six sentences from Chapter 8.


From her position facing the rear of the room, Rita spotted a familiar face and swallowed her tea quickly.  “Why hello.  Fancy meeting you here.”  She got up to kiss the cheek of a handsome slightly older man who was most definitely not her husband.  “You remember Ellen, don’t you?  Ellie, you remember my brother Henry?”


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30 Comments
Donna Cummings link
4/22/2012 12:44:12 am

Ooh, this is intriguing. Can't wait to see more about Henry. :)

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Cate Masters link
4/22/2012 12:45:08 am

Intriguing! She's obviously familiar with the older gent. It makes me want to find out who he is.

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Sandra Bunino link
4/22/2012 12:51:36 am

Handsome man that's "...most definitely not her husband" - now that is intriguing! I need to know more!

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Angela Quarles link
4/22/2012 01:20:04 am

Intriguing, can't wait to see how this plays out :)

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J.M. Blackman link
4/22/2012 01:33:50 am

I definitely want to know why she got nervous. Most people are happy to see their siblings, or at least not anxious. You've got me wanting to know more.

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Karyn Good link
4/22/2012 01:53:28 am

Intriguing six that raises questions and makes me wonder about the handsome, older gentleman.

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Sandi Sookoo
4/22/2012 02:16:39 am

Ooh, very mysterious!

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Stephanie link
4/22/2012 02:36:10 am

Hmm, the "most definitely not her husband" indicates an inappropriate attraction, but then you slam us in the face with the brother thing. Nicely done!

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Zee Monodee link
4/22/2012 02:55:38 am

You definitely have me intrigued... :)

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Kate Meader link
4/22/2012 03:02:13 am

I fourth and fifth the "most definitely not her husband" line. Nice and mysterious.

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Cara Bristol link
4/22/2012 03:07:44 am

Hmm...makes me curious. Intriguing six.

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Silver James link
4/22/2012 03:11:56 am

Oooh. Interesting that she's surprised to see him yet she's very smooth in trying to cover her reaction. I wonder if Ellie does remember Rita's brother. Nice six. There's "action" there and layers of emotion. Well done.

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Monica Enderle Pierce link
4/22/2012 03:12:13 am

There's a hint of discomfort here. Interesting things are afoot.

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sue link
4/22/2012 03:57:27 am

might not be her brother? Fancy seeing you here - would someone actually say this? only reason I ask is cause my edit program would be all over this line. Though might say it if is a cover up....

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Kate Warren
4/22/2012 04:04:34 am

Spell check doesn't like most of my writing, Sue. LOL I'm sorry to say that it actually is her brother. And Rita would say that. She's an interesting person and kind of a schemer. She might even have known he would be there. Sometimes even I don't know what Rita is up to.

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Joanne Stewart link
4/22/2012 04:33:55 am

I agree. There's a hint of discomfort here that's very intriguing! Definitely makes me want to read more! Great snippet.

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Lorraine Paton link
4/22/2012 05:23:34 am

So, Rita is playing matchmaker. I wonder how Ellen feels about that. LOL. :)

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Kate Warren
4/22/2012 08:48:03 am

Exactly, Lorraine!

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Sue Ann Bowling link
4/22/2012 05:33:06 am

I didn't catch discomfort as much as surprise--she was not expecting him to be there, but doesn't want him to get away before she greets him (and introduces her friend?)

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Jessica Schira link
4/22/2012 06:41:11 am

I thought this was a pleasent six that featured some nice characters and sharp writing. The emotion I picked up from the not he husband line was mild puzzlement. The only thing I didn't like about the selection was the use of the word slightly. I'm not one of those writers who thinks that adverbs should never be used, I like them, but in this case it felt discordant. Just a friendly suggestion.

I felt this was a very nice six.

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Kate Warren
4/22/2012 08:49:27 am

Thanks for the suggestion, Jessica. Normally I wouldn't have used it either but I thought it was important to note that though he's an older man it isn't by much. Rita is his younger sister only by two years.

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Sarah Ballance link
4/22/2012 07:56:19 am

This has such personality. I love the "not her husband" part! And it's pouring rain here and now I want tea, thanks to you, LOL!

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A.S. Fenichel link
4/22/2012 08:12:17 am

Her reaction is pretty darn exciting. I wan't to know how she knows Henry. Great job!

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Ursula Grey link
4/22/2012 10:36:17 am

Nicely paced, intriguing six:-) Nice!

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Carrie-Anne link
4/22/2012 11:39:20 am

I also like the "not her husband" line.

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Skye Warren link
4/22/2012 11:50:22 am

Nice, I can feel the foreshadowing. Subtle but nice!

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Elaine Cantrell link
4/22/2012 12:44:42 pm

Can't wait to find out what's up with Henry.

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Teresa Cypher link
4/22/2012 03:29:56 pm

Another great six, Kate. For a split second, I thought--oh no! If he isn't her husband, who is he? lol...should have known better :-) !

Are you going to sell ebooks on Amazon?

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Kate Warren
4/25/2012 05:39:06 am

Among other places, yes. It will be available in eBook form first, then in paperback later.

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Chantel Rhondeau link
4/23/2012 01:13:08 pm

Oh! Henry, huh? I can't wait to see what Ellen thinks of him!

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