WeWriWa 1/25/15

1/24/2015

It's the weekend again, and here we are basking in literary excerpts once more. Eight lines of poetry or prose can lift us to the heights, or plunge us to the depths, as wordsmiths blithely toy with our emotions. Yes, that includes me. ;)

If you wish to join in the fun, either in reading or in posting (or how about both?) along with the Weekend Writing Warriors, click on the image below.

Continuing from last week...after literally falling for his dream girl, Duncan lost his heart in her eyes and her readily expressed concern for him. Let's see where it goes from there. *creative punctuation has been used*

He rose with as much grace as he could muster under the circumstances and stared at her without being remotely abashed.
The lady made no comment, merely looked at him for what seemed like both hours and mere seconds. “What is your name?”
“Duncan. What is yours, will I be able to say it?”
She frowned slightly, confused. “Why should you not?”
“I have heard that angels’ names are not fit for human tongues--and you must surely be an angel.”

That Duncan is such a sweet-talker, but he's never used that line before. This girl brings out his inner poet.

I'm battling another bad headache tonight, but hoping it won't be plaguing me tomorrow.

Kate

39 Comments

charmaine gordon link

1/25/2015 01:52:24 am

Delicious. Every bit of this snippet is humorous and charming. Good job.

Kate Warren

1/25/2015 05:13:50 am

Thanks Charmaine!

Neva Rodriguez link

1/25/2015 02:09:52 am

Funny, my "m" key was sticking the other day also. I don't know if it's my computer, but I can't find your eight, I did read your excerpt, thought it was awesome! Your trailer is also very cute. Good going! Congrats on your book, I will definitely check it out.

Kate Warren

1/25/2015 05:14:41 am

So this "m" key thing isn't an isolated event...hm...

Thanks for checking out my excerpt and trailer! I'm glad you liked them. :)

Patricia Preston link

1/25/2015 02:52:14 am

Hi Kate. I didn't see your snippet. Anyway, hope you are well and happy today!

Kate Warren

1/25/2015 05:15:06 am

Thank you, Pat. So far so good. :)

Kate Warren

1/25/2015 05:08:33 am

Oh no! Weebly ate half my post again!

I sincerely apologize to everyone who came looking for my eight and didn't find it. I will edit the post to add it back in.

Thank you Charmaine! I guess it was on there for a while. :)

Thanks Neva and Pat as well.

Kate Warren

1/25/2015 05:10:05 am

Well this is odd. When I went in to edit the post, suddenly the rest was back... *shrugs helplessly*

Veronica Scott link

1/25/2015 05:35:53 am

Oh I do like his way with words (thanks to you)! and loved the time being like hours and yet like seconds...excellent excerpt.

Kate Warren

1/25/2015 06:49:30 am

Thank you, Veronica!

Sarah W link

1/25/2015 05:59:00 am

And now the moment of truth: Does she giggle and blush, blush and thump him with her book, or roll her eyes but secretly blush?

I love this Kate! It's about time Duncan fell in love, instead of just stepping in it. :D

Kate Warren

1/25/2015 06:50:22 am

Thanks Sarah. I'm going to continue with this scene for at least another week so you'll get to see her reaction.

Jess Schira

1/25/2015 06:29:29 am

Great snippet Kate. I love the visual you created with the first paragraph.

Kate Warren

1/25/2015 06:51:08 am

Thank you, Jess. That paragraph seemed odd to me at first, but there is a kind of poetry to it. :)

Alexis Duran link

1/25/2015 07:32:31 am

A sweet and enjoyable snippet. Duncan certainly recovered nicely. Can't wait to hear her response.

Kate Warren

1/25/2015 08:35:06 am

Thanks, Alexis!

Evelyn Jules link

1/25/2015 08:07:28 am

Oh my, is he ever a sweet-talker! I love that she brings out his inner poet. Such a lovely and fun snippet. Hope you feel better, Kate!

Kate Warren

1/25/2015 08:35:47 am

Thank you, Evelyn. Stupid headache is back, but I'm on top of it so far.

Caitlin Stern link

1/25/2015 08:31:31 am

That's kind of clever, if a bit sappy. I wonderful if it will impress?

Kate Warren

1/25/2015 08:36:48 am

I figure it's a bit less sappy in the 15th century than it would be today. One of the benefits of writing historical fiction some of the time. :)

Tune in next week to find out!

Elaine Cantrell link

1/25/2015 09:29:30 am

Flattery, flattery. Now to see whether she likes it or not.

Kate Warren

1/25/2015 10:31:34 am

Indeed. Thanks for stopping by, Elaine!

Aheila link

1/25/2015 11:18:39 am

Hahaha! I love your take on the "you must be an angel" pick-up line. Nice dynamics between the two of them. I'm quiet intrigued to learn more about her character.

Kate Warren

1/25/2015 12:11:07 pm

Thank you, Aheila. That angel thing had to have been original once, right?

Liza Barrett link

1/25/2015 11:43:52 am

A sticky m key would drive me nuts. I used to have a sticky y key and it bugged the crap out of me.

I like the *creative punctuation has been used* :)

And that is one hell of a pickup line ;)

Kate Warren

1/25/2015 12:11:56 pm

It IS driving me nuts. I think I've almost got it unstuck though. :)

Thank you for your kind words, Liza.

Alice link

1/25/2015 12:36:46 pm

i enjoyed the idea of looking for hours and mere minutes. I am intrigued to read previous snippets.

Kate Warren

1/25/2015 02:14:23 pm

Thanks, Alice.

Victoria Adams link

1/25/2015 12:58:18 pm

oh - now that's an awesome last line. Swoon worthy.

Kate Warren

1/25/2015 02:14:43 pm

Thank you, Victoria. :)

Cecilia Corona link

1/25/2015 01:07:02 pm

Great snippet. Loved the visual!

Kate Warren

1/25/2015 02:15:03 pm

Thanks, Cecelia!

Jenna Jaxon

1/25/2015 01:20:46 pm

He is a very sweet talker. I could lose my heart to someone like that. Great 8!

Kate Warren

1/25/2015 02:15:36 pm

Right. So how can a fictional girl stand a chance? ;) Thank you, Jenna.

Christina Ochs link

1/25/2015 03:28:57 pm

Haha! Now she'll probably roll her eyes while secretly being charmed. Duncan doesn't stay down for long, does he? I like him already!

Kate Warren

1/26/2015 12:08:22 am

Thanks, Christina. :)

karen michelle Nutt link

1/26/2015 01:58:27 am

So charming, isn't he. Loved the cute snippet!!

Kate Warren

1/26/2015 04:54:57 am

Thank you, Karen. :)

Millie Burns link

1/26/2015 01:06:51 pm

Oh my, it's the you must be an angel line : ) Too cute. Looking forward to reading her reaction.

Kate Warren

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