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WeWriWa 3  Love denied.

2/16/2013

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My dear friends and readers, this week I share a romantic yet melancholy eight sentences.  Sometimes romance is painful.

Christian, duke of Langdon, is in love.  He is also nearly finished negotiating a betrothal contract that his late father sought for him.  The maiden to whom he is as good as promised is under the guardianship of a greedy uncle who will stop at nothing to see her become a duchess (and she's no more inclined to wed Christian than he is to wed her).  The maiden he loves is Princess Therese.  Therese loves him right back but there's nothing they can do.  We join Christian as he is despising both his future uncle-in-law and his late father for getting him into this mess, and wishing he were free to try for the woman he loves.




           His chances would not have been great, but at least he would have had the possibility of success.  Now he could not even speak to her in too familiar a manner, could not touch her except in a dance, could not write to her.  
           No one could keep him from writing of  her though.  He’d filled page after page of parchment putting his feelings into verse.  He wrote songs she would never hear; sonnets she would never read.  He would be idly sketching and look down to see her face on the page, her eyes staring into his.  
           Passing her in the corridors and halls his breath would catch.  His desire for the princess drove him to distraction, but even stronger than that was his longing to hear her confidences, dry her tears, share her laughter and
her dreams, to keep her safe and make her feel cherished as she should be, to see his child in her arms.



That's my eight for the week.  Thank you for visiting, and I hope to see you as I make the rounds to support the other talented authors who are part of WeWriWa.  

Kate


 
69 Comments
Ginny Aschenbach
2/16/2013 02:04:38 pm

You perfectly captured in just sentences the mind consuming nature of attraction. If one can not discuss it outwardly, it bursts from the seams in some other way, like it must be let out

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Kate Warren
2/17/2013 05:09:28 am

Yes we creative types have to express ourselves. Did you get my email about the giveaway, Ginny?

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Veronica Scott link
2/17/2013 12:37:12 am

Oh so achingly sad! Can't wait to read more in the hopes love can find a way - terrific snippet! Wow...

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Kate Warren
2/17/2013 05:10:06 am

I'm rather hoping that myself but I've put them in a very tricky situation. Thanks for coming by, Veronica.

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charmaine gordon link
2/17/2013 01:17:53 am

A gorgeous eight, Kate. You've captured the flavor of the times and his impossible situation. Thanks.

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Kate Warren
2/17/2013 05:10:24 am

Thank you, Charmaine!

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Sara Barnard link
2/17/2013 02:31:40 am

Very visual and heart wrenching! Great 8, as usual!

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Kate Warren
2/17/2013 05:11:01 am

Thanks, Sara! I'm looking forward to reading "A Heart on Hold."

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Katya Armock link
2/17/2013 03:53:30 am

Lovely 8!

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Kate Warren
2/17/2013 05:11:19 am

Thank you, Katya. Lovely to meet you.

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Debbie link
2/17/2013 04:14:45 am

Poor Christian; he's just pining away and I feel his pain. Great excerpt!

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Kate Warren
2/17/2013 05:12:13 am

Thanks, Debbie. I feel it too. The first draft isn't finished so as yet several hearts are up in the air.

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Monica Enderle Pierce link
2/17/2013 04:35:28 am

Such sadness. And I feel for his wife-to-be, as well. Will she know the sonnets and sighs are not for her? Don't know how you're going to fix this, Kate, but I do hope everyone finds happiness in the end.

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Kate Warren
2/17/2013 05:14:48 am

I don't know how I'm going to fix it either, quite frankly. I'm open to suggestions though, if you have any ideas.

The only good part is that the betrothed-to-be is in love with someone else as well. Of course that means four hearts potentially broken, so maybe that's not good either.

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Elaine Cantrell link
2/17/2013 04:52:49 am

A beautiful description of a man consumned by love.

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Kate Warren
2/17/2013 05:15:23 am

Thank you, Elaine!

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Catherine Cavendish link
2/17/2013 04:57:12 am

Romantic, sad, poignant. What's not to love? Great 8, Kate!

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Kate Warren
2/17/2013 05:15:43 am

Thanks, Catherine!

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Joanne Stewart link
2/17/2013 04:59:24 am

You've captured his longing beautifully. Terrific snippet. I feel for him.

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Kate Warren
2/17/2013 05:17:01 am

Thank you, Joanne. I have to admit this subplot really gets to me too. *Bad writer! No keeping lovers apart! Go to your corner!*

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A.S. Fenichel link
2/17/2013 05:13:18 am

This is the saddest thing. I felt all of his pain.

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Kate Warren
2/17/2013 05:17:40 am

Thanks, A.S. Between Christian's pain and all these lovely comments, I'm starting to tear up!

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Evelyn Jules link
2/17/2013 05:41:42 am

Wow, this is beautifully written. I love this line especially: No one could keep him from writing of her though. - I love how deeply he desires her. Fabulous excerpt!

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Kate Warren
2/17/2013 07:07:45 am

Thank you, Evelyn.

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Sue Ann Bowling link
2/17/2013 05:43:08 am

Sounds positively Shakespearean.

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Kate Warren
2/17/2013 07:08:23 am

Awesome! I wasn't even going for that, but I'll certainly take it. :o)

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Karen Michelle Nutt link
2/17/2013 05:47:38 am

Heart-wrenching snippet. Loved it!!

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Kate Warren
2/17/2013 07:08:41 am

Thanks, Karen!

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sue link
2/17/2013 05:52:09 am

yes I agree you've captured the period. and his agony is palpable

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Kate Warren
2/17/2013 07:09:13 am

Thank you, Sue. I'm glad both came across.

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Siobhan Muir link
2/17/2013 06:18:17 am

Oh, man, he's got it bad. Nicely done with the agony, Kate. :)

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Kate Warren
2/17/2013 07:10:03 am

Thanks, Siobhan! I almost feel bad for putting him through that.

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S. J. Maylee link
2/17/2013 06:19:12 am

So sad. You've got to fix this. Promise me you'll fix this. :)

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Kate Warren
2/17/2013 07:11:31 am

I promise! I just have to figure out how to do it. Why, oh why, do I write myself into these corners?

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ann swann link
2/17/2013 06:23:20 am

Great 8 ~ I think you've captured both the period and his feelings very well.

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Kate Warren
2/17/2013 07:12:01 am

Thank you, Ann!

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Clare Davidson link
2/17/2013 06:52:27 am

He's got it bad. I love the things that he does and especially the thought of her drawn eyes staring at him from the page. Lovely.

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Kate Warren
2/17/2013 07:13:28 am

Thanks, Clare. The part about her drawing staring at him was one of those rare moments where the words surprise me as I type. I love when that happens.

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Nan Reinhardt link
2/17/2013 07:00:58 am

Wow...just wow! What beautiful wordcraft.You painted a lovely scene of an impassioned man longing for a woman he doesn't believe he can ever have. Can't wait for more!

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Kate Warren
2/17/2013 07:13:55 am

Thank you so much, Nan!

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Paula Martin link
2/17/2013 07:13:08 am

Romantic - but heartrending for him.

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Kate Warren
2/17/2013 07:15:30 am

Thank you, Paula. It is indeed heartrending. I have a lot of young characters at an age to pair off and I'm afraid I've made several of them very unhappy.

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karen Y. bynum link
2/17/2013 07:40:16 am

Definitely captured my attention with his declaration of love. Great 8!

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Kate Warren
2/17/2013 07:51:24 am

Thanks so much for stopping by, Karen!

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Amy Durham link
2/17/2013 07:51:42 am

Oh the angst! Such a beautiful portrayal of his feelings!

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Kate Warren
2/17/2013 11:46:07 am

Thank you, Amy!

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Kylie Scott link
2/17/2013 07:51:54 am

Such lovely writing, Kate. The emotion in this is just beautiful.

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Kate Warren
2/17/2013 08:51:03 am

Thanks, Kylie! :o)

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Sarah W link
2/17/2013 09:18:32 am

Stunningly tender, Kate---please tell us she returns his devotion? Or at least that someone deserving <i>will</i> ?

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Kate Warren
2/17/2013 09:36:04 am

Oh she does! She's crazy in love with him and devastated at the unfairness of the situation, but she has even less freedom to find a solution than he does. A woman in that time had so little power in her life, and a princess had even less.

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Melissa MacKinnon link
2/17/2013 09:40:24 am

Wow, yes, this is sad. Tender and heart achingly good. Fantastic snippet this week.

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Kate Warren
2/17/2013 11:07:14 am

Thank you, Melissa!

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Frank Fisher link
2/17/2013 11:41:24 am

Such a sad situation. I felt for him and is torment. I loved how you described his feelings for her internally and sensed the connection.

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Kate Warren
2/17/2013 11:45:11 am

Thanks, Frank! Great to get a male perspective on this. My husband and father are good for that but they don't read my work until at least the first draft is finished.

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Karysa Faire link
2/17/2013 12:41:45 pm

Sooooooo sweet!

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Kate Warren
2/17/2013 01:11:29 pm

Thanks, Karysa!

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AJ Bradley link
2/17/2013 12:53:40 pm

Great voice here. Very melancholy and romantic, love it.

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Kate Warren
2/17/2013 01:11:53 pm

Thank you, AJ!

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Jenna Jaxon link
2/17/2013 02:27:03 pm

Achingly poignant. The forbidden love trope is so appealing and this describes his feelings so eloquently. Bravo!

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Kate Warren
2/18/2013 08:23:24 am

Thanks, Jenna!

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Goran Zidar link
2/17/2013 04:14:57 pm

A moving 8 sentences, the way you described the depth of his feelings was excellent. Thanks for sharing

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Kate Warren
2/18/2013 08:24:23 am

Thank you, Goran. I always wonder if my male characters are believable. Your feedback is reassuring that I'm on the right track.

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Marcia link
2/18/2013 02:26:03 am

aww, yes, sad, but a bit hopeful. I can't help but think he'll only be able tolerate living like that for so long. Since he's in our story, he's must do something pretty interesting :)

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Kate Warren
2/18/2013 08:26:21 am

Darn spoilers. I can't tell you his involvement in the main plot but it's definitely interesting. Thank you for visiting, Marcia. :o)

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Melonie link
2/18/2013 04:36:23 am

I think Ginny, the first commenter, really nailed it - when one is in love, it has to spill out somewhere! If he can't write to her, he'd write of her - exactly! Very nice.

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Kate Warren
2/18/2013 08:26:55 am

Thank you, Melonie!

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Joyce Scarbrough link
2/18/2013 01:07:20 pm

What a touching illustration of his heart! Wonderful snippet.

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Dani-Lyn Alexander link
2/18/2013 01:25:42 pm

What a beautiful, emotional eight. Great snippet!

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Sarah Ballance link
2/23/2013 01:52:53 pm

Beautiful and amazing! WOW.

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